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Old April 5th, 2013, 02:47 PM
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In a pool of my blood I think about,
the kind of justice the man hands out.
So quick to draw, so quick to shoot,
almost blew me from my boots.

Now laying here I wonder why,
why me Lord, why must I die.
I'm not bad, might not be good,
mostly I'm iunderstood.

I hear the rale in my chest,
blood is bubbling from my breast.
Crowding in I see the faces,
my thoughts are on other places.

I can't get up, can't run from here,
my future now seems pretty clear.
My legs won't move, can't feel a thing.
in my head the gunshots ring.

I remember a hammer hitting me,
dropping me down to one knee.
I remember being hit again,
paying the price, the wages of sin.

Then it all hit me again,
It was my blood I was laying in.
Was this it, was this all,
was this my final curtain call.

One last time I looked around,
hearing a sirens wailing sound.
I saw the strangers looking on,
heard someone whisper, ''he's almost gone''.

I had the strength for one word, ''why''.
my breath then left me with a sigh.
This is it, I'm dead and gone,
someone else can carry on.

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Old April 5th, 2013, 07:39 PM
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Well done but very dark. I could definitely picture the scene.
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